Emigration
Emigration is the common problem in our modern world. Lately, it became more intensive during the financial crisis. Many young and talented people tend to leave their home country for many different reasons such as political, economical problems and bad living conditions.
First of all, people emigrates from their home country because of the political system. Those who believe that they are not given enough political freedom choose to find it elsewhere. Some get a new citizenship in order to have a better living atmosphere, free from political chaos. Also people forced to leave their homeland because of racial or religious abuse. An example for that is The Holocaust, during The World War 2 many Jewish people lost their political rights and were forced to leave Germany and its occupied territories.
Secondly, another cause of emigration is unemployment and low wages. Young specialists and workers leave their country for a better career opportunities abraod. Also, people emigrates because of the lack of jobs in their region or country. Also in wealthy countries people work in better conditions and they get a four time higher wages doing the same job. Another aspect is travelling, in addition to work people can explore foreign country, learn it language and get better wiev on history and traditions.
Finally, many people are forced to leave their homeland, because of the bad living conditions. In some African countries people leave their fatherland because of the famine and water shortage, caused by natural disasters such as as droughts, floods and earth quakes. Furthermore there are many man made disasters such as nuclear meltdown or heavy pollution. An example for that is Chernobyl and Fukushima disasters which forced many people to live their homes.
In conclusion, I want to say that emigration is caused by many different reasons, such as financial problems, bad living conditions, and government restrictions. But many people do not understand that emigration is harmful for their country and people who live in it.
The structure is good, but you make lots of mistakes which concern tenses and articles. You ought to pay more attention to punctuation. The conclusion should be more expanded. Thesis statement is good and you support it with arguments in the body.
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